1st draft feedback

Those who I asked mentioned that they like it but they feel as though something is missing but they don't know what it is, taking this on I felt that the feedback didn't help me much so I went on to ask some people out of school who I felt would give me a more genuine opinion and they came to the conclusion that:

• Editing is too slow
• Not very interesting to watch
• The establishing should should be removed
• Concept is good
• try something with the editing

Taking this into consideration, I will make the modifications accordingly...